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Band 4.5

‘Power tends to corrupt, and absolute power corrupts absolutely.’

The statement means that when someone is given
power
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 or a position where they can influence others, they will always want more and become greedy.
People
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 in
power
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 often become selfish and only think about their needs, and in
people
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 with absolute
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,
this
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 happens to a greater extent. An example of
this
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 is a dictatorship – their absolute
power
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 over a country corrupts and often they become selfish and try to bend others to their will.
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However
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 not all
people
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 in a position of
power
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 become corrupted. There are many jobs which provide
people
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 with
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for example
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 a teacher. Teachers have
power
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 over their students
however
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 they
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this
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 to educate and teach inexperienced individuals.
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, members of parliament have strong morals through their promises to the public. When elected and placed in a position of
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, their morals don’t change. I believe that it is very hard to have
power
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 and not
use
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 it for your own personal gain. Our subconscious will always play a role in our decisions and often the decisions made will benefit the person in
power
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. Most often things you believe strongly in
affect
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 yourself directly or indirectly so how you
use
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 your
power
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 will
definately
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definitely
 affect you. In
history
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 we can see that
people
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 in absolute
power
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,
for
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example
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 monarchs and dictators
use
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 their
power
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 to expand their nation by invading other nations to increase their
power
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 and wealth. In conclusion, I believe that
people
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 in
power
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use
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 it for their personal gain.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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