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Some people believe that the activity of large multinational corporations mostly benefits the economy of developing countries. Other people take the opposite view and feel that these large multinationals are generally harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Without a denying, with the global division of
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, a widely heated debate as to whether the activity of large multinational corporations benefits from the economy of developing countries has received great attention from the public. Whereas some people are opposed to the opinion, from my point of view, I am holding an identical opinion to the statement and an array of reasons will be elaborated on as follows. On the one hand, several issues of transnational corporations might be generated.
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 with, the unnecessary cost would be spent including transportation fees and personnel costs. To put it another way, owing to branches in a different country, firms might spend the extra money and waste resource on maintaining the communication and transportation of fees.
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, concerns about the local technology and talents might affect the economic development of the countries in the future. To be more specific, multinational companies might cause a brain drain and confidential information was breached.
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, as far as I am concerned, the benefits of multinational corporations are supported by a myriad of reasons.
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 of all, every country could cost down for concentrating on manufacturing specific products or researching their field.
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, the expenditure on other work could be saved and spent on relatively vital machines or investments.
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, the different nation has their dominant technologies or resources;
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, utilizing and making good use of their outstanding natural resources or particular ability might be effective and efficient compared to one-step production. To sum up, based on the aforementioned, even though some people are holding an opposite opinion toward the statement, from my point of view, I am in
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 of transnational companies that might benefit developing nations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job creation
  • Technology transfer
  • Economic growth
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Exploitation of labor
  • Unfair labor practices
  • Working conditions
  • Job security
  • Environmental degradation
  • Pollution
  • Deforestation
  • Depletion of natural resources
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Erosion of local cultures
  • Balance and regulation
  • Host countries
  • Implement policies
  • Mitigate negative impacts
  • Enforcing labor laws
  • Environmental regulations
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