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Computers are being used more and more in education and some people believe there will soon be no role for the teacher in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Technology is being used increasingly in the classroom and some
people
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 believe that educators will become redundant. I somewhat disagree that
teachers
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 will be replaced by machines. The main reason why I think that
teachers
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 are essential is
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 they encourage and discipline
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. Many
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 find it difficult to be interested in learning new things.
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 educators are needed to make classes more interesting and stimulate
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’ desires for learning.
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, in the case of young
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,
teachers
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 often need to force
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 to learn through the use of punishments. Another reason why
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 are needed is
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 they can teach young
people
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 important skills and values.
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 and teach them how to appropriately interact with their peers.
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, if
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 only learn using machines they will lose the opportunity to learn important social skills and values.
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, studying over the internet certainly offers a lot of
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, we are able to study in the comfort of our own homes, without the need to commute to school.
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, we can choose to study at any time we like even in the middle of the night. In conclusion, I somewhat disagree that machines can replace
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.
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 is because
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 can encourage
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 to learn and teach them how to interact with other
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.
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, computers do offer the ability for
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 to learn anywhere at any time.

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