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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. This has more advantages or disadvantages.

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The professional world today has become extremely competitive. In order to reach the top,
people
 have now started increasing their
work
 duration due to which they rarely find any time for other activities. Working more
hours
 might have some benefits when it comes to a
career
 but it certainly has more side effects.
This
 essay will talk about the pros and cons of long office
hours
. To commence with,
people
 who
work
 additional
hours
 have an opportunity to learn and gain more
experience
 in a shorter duration of time which will give a boost to their
career
.
For example
, someone who works for 12
hours
 a day certainly gains 50% more
experience
 than a person who works for 8
hours
.
This
 places them in higher job positions in the early stage of their
career
.
Although
 staying longer at
work
 enhances
career
 growth, it has numerous disadvantages. one of the major disadvantages is poor
health
, working extra
hours
 disturbs the natural balance which makes you either compromise your sleep or your physical fitness.
Health
 issues like disc bulge, obesity, and diabetes are increasing every day because
people
 are not creating a perfect
work
-life balance. As someone who is suffering from poor back
health
, I know how wrong I was to
work
 extra
hours
.
In addition
 to that, due to increased working
hours
,
people
 don’t have enough time for their loved ones which drifts them away and weakens the bonds of their relationship, ultimately leaving them with no emotional support when needed which affects their mental
health
. To summarize, additional working
hours
 might give you more working
experience
 and high income but in the long run, it is going to be a decision that you might regret someday. It is better to gain similar
experience
 in 1.5 years
instead
 of in 1 year than to be in bed for the
next
 6 months because of serious
health
 issues.
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