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Some people think that the best way to stay fit is joining a gym or health clubs. While others think That doing everyday activities such as walking or climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both aspects give Your Own opinion

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Nowadays, Some percentage of
crowd
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 think that gym is the best way to stay healthy while
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, some crowd are of opinion that
daytoday
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day today
 activities like walking,climbing stairs are the best way for staying fit. While there are different views that have been formulated on
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 topic,
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 discuss them in detail
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below
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 paragraphs.
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 with, There have been different
fitness
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centers
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 and
the
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gyms that have outgrown in number in
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 few decades.
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people
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 have remained fit in older generations as well when the
fitness
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 industry was still evolving.
Fitness
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centers
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 are not a
neccesity
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necessity
 to stay fit. There are still many remote places where only limited
fitness
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 facilities are available but
people
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 certainly maintain a healthy lifestyle.
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 , many villages in remote places
dont
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don't
 have gym
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 but are quite active due to
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 of physical
exercises
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 in
agriculture
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 sector or their daily routine work.
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, some
people
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 require motivation to remain healthy. Herewith, comes the role of
fitness
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 clubs & their coaches. These clubs maintain
an
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energy in gyms to
workout
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work out
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, so someone who is not motivated
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 feels
working
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 out more often.
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,
fitness
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 industries have now invented more techniques in the form of different
exercises
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 so there are many choices for
people
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 in health clubs, to give some examples
they
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are pilates,
zumba
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, yoga, water yoga, weight training etc. To summarize,
People
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 can enjoy
while
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themselves while
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 they are
also
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 staying fit.
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, Gym
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centers
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 are not necessary to stay fit
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In my opinion, Gyming
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centers
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 now have more interesting
exercises
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 to stay fit rather than traditional
exercises
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 like walking and climbing.

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Your opinion

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