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Many parents complain that computer games have no value to their children's study. On the contrary, those online games have produced a lot of negative effects on their mental and physical development. What is your opinion?

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In the new era, we are all aware that most of the
childeren
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children
 have addicted to
play
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computer
games
. Many parents complain
about
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that these
games
 have no
possitive
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positive
 impact on children's mental or physical development. I am in favour of
this
 statement. In terms of growing
with
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the computer
a computer
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computer
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 as a kid, they have the ability to use
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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 very well than their parents. The
computer
 game industry is getting bigger and bigger depending on that high demand. We
all
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concern
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 about most of the
games
 are not proper for children.
Therefore
, we should educate them about screen
time
 and their choices. These
games
 affect our little ones' mental and physical
health
 in a bad way. They
also
 spend their
time
 studying
instead
 of playing
games
.
Firstly
, in the terms of their mental
health
, If they spend more
time
 in
the
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front of the
computer
, it would be hard for them to distinguish what the reality is. They would assume that everything is virtual in real life as
computer
games
.
Secondly
, long hours
spending
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 in front of the
computer
whereas
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while
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 playing
games
, they will not be active enough for their age. It is important for their physical
health
 to stay active. They are young and their muscle and bones grow so fast
and
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physical
health
 starts with being active physically.
However
, there are some
games
 that can teach some proper attitude and knowledge to children.
Therefore
 we have to educate them about what they should pick and how much
time
 they spend on a
computer
. At that point, we should be aware of their choices on
games
. In conclusion, there are millions of
games
 on computers and as
a
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responsible
parents
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, we should observe the
time
 and pick the right
games
 for our little ones for their physical and mental
health
.
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