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The only way to improve road safety is to impose severe punishments for driving offences. Do you agree or disagree?

#road #safety #punishments #offences
Nowadays, dealing with
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 of
roads’
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 safety has become a major problem worldwide. In some countries, severe punishments have
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 for driving offences.
However
, I strongly believe that it is not the best solution to prevent
car
 accidents on the roads. The effects of proper instruction, hardening the
test
 of the driving license for fresh candidates, and increase
of
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roads’ quality might considerably have better results that will be discussed
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following
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 paragraphs.
Firstly
, nearly any driver needs to be instructed about driving techniques and different conditions of driving a
car
 even though they have received a driving license. As an example, in Vancouver, which is famous for
low
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 rate of
car
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accident
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,
people
 see instructions and alerts about safe driving nearly everywhere
such
 as
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 advertisements and television programs. In fact, the more we are aware of the danger of driving offences, the more carefully we drive on the roads.
Consequently
,
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well instructed
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people
 drive concisely which will prevent them to experience
car
accident
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 on roads.
Secondly
, as the procedure of getting
driving
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 license
get
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 harder,
people
 with
high
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 ability of driving make it to pass the driving
test
. Statistics reveal that after applying major changes in driving
test
 fundamentals in Canada, the rate of
car
 accidents declined in 1951. It’s clear that
,
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people
 who have passed the
test
 successfully would be
a
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better
driver
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 due to having more practical and harder tests. In conclusion, manipulating the procedures of driving exams and giving candidates more challenging
test
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 would be a proper solution which has shown its results formerly.
Finally
, old vehicles sometimes might be difficult to control. Based on police statistics, nearly 72
percent
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 of
car
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 accident in 2021 was for
the
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automobiles
which
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produced before 1995.
In other words
, drivers have more ability to control the vehicle in new-brand cars. To summarize, I believe that well instruction of
people
, more challenging driving tests, and replacing old vehicles with new ones are the best solutions
of
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 improving road safety. I believe that there would be better solutions in the future
such
 as
development
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 of cars with artificial intelligence,
however
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 currently we can not rely on
theorical
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theoretical
 and unexperimented ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • reckless behavior
  • psychological deterrence
  • adhere
  • penalties
  • awareness campaigns
  • knowledge and skills
  • technological solutions
  • advanced safety features
  • automatic braking systems
  • lane departure warnings
  • traffic surveillance
  • enforce laws
  • socio-economic impact
  • disproportionately
  • broader social issues
  • community engagement
  • road safety culture
  • collective responsibility
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