“Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

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The number of capital punishments across the globe

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gradually decreasing as some lawmakers are doing amendments to convert the death penalty

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sentence.

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deadly punishments should be continued to combat

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and violence.

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for many governments is

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can be controlled only with cruel laws

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is because terror groups are always a greater threat

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innocent

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public.

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, recently, some terrorists from Pakistan murdered innocent people in Jammu, India. To tackle these issues policymakers

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with no choice as they have to

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terrorists

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only by most deadly judgement rather than petty crimes.

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policies not only punish the convicts but

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creates awareness in citizens so that they never ever think of

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, there are

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extensive amount of internal crimes like rapes, murders, and mass shootings. Over the

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decade, the number of

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crimes

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gradually increased as the laws in some countries are not as strict as before.

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, In ancient times, in Arab countries,

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offences

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rape had a cruel

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like chopping a convict in front of

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, lawbreakers do not dare to commit

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offences.

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executing

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it in a public every citizen will aware

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law and

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consequences

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which will

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build

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a better society.

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, to recapitulate some people may claim capital punishment is not necessary;

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criminals to stop committing

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actions authorities must continue

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penalty to control the violence and

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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