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Some shops are open 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. Do you think it is a good thing for customers, the shop staff and the economy as a whole?

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In recent ,years we have been seeing a significant rise in the number of retail shops as the demand for everyday products has increased.Many believe stores should be opened for 24 hours for the whole week.I strongly agree with
this
 and in
this
 essay, I will
further
, elucidate my opinion on the same.
To begin
 with , grocery products nowadays, are the need of the hour and one might need any product at any time of the day.
For instance
, a person who had an accident late at night will require a
first
 aid kit and is,
therefore
,
therefore
 able to acquire these things from a medicinal store which is opened for 24 hours a day.
Furthermore
, students usually feel hungry at midnight so outlets like 24*7 provide them with snacks at any time they wish to buy.
In addition
 to
this
, it will eventually be a boost to the economy as more and more people are coming to buy the products and
this
 will help increase the publicity of that store.On the one hand, it is not so healthy for shop staffs because.
Additionally
, they need to open their department store for the entire day which hampers their private life but
on the other hand
, it aids the outlet in generating a good amount of revenue. To sum it up, shops opening for 24 hours for the whole week is surely an asset for the economy, it may have some drawbacks like a disturbance in the private life of staffs but its advantages certainly outweigh the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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