Nowadays, social media affects people’s lives significantly. What impact does this have on the society? Is it a negative or a positive development?

The
media
has a significant impact on the way
people
live their lives. While others said that social
media
brings positive effects, I would hold the belief that it has many negative effects on life. Social
media
has several negatives for users.
Firstly
,
media
influences
people
into buying products that they
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don
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not need to buy through advertisements. Many
people
after watching commercials on television think that they should buy promotional products.
As a result
, they make impulse purchases without realizing the need for these items.
For instance
, most consumers replace appliances in their homes after seeing
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advertisement
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for a new product without thinking that their old one is good.
Secondly
,
people
could read false
information
, which makes them have
distorted
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look
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.
For example
, television
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false
information
that could confuse the public.
Therefore
, they could not come to a conclusion because they could not tell what is correct
information
and what is bad
information
. Social
media
has several positives for users.
Firstly
,
people
could update
information
from anywhere and whenever they want.
Therefore
, regularly updated
information
would help them make decisions to improve their lives,
such
as enhancing home security bef, preventing natural disasters, and so on.
Secondly
, the
media
makes it easier for
people
to find
information
.
As a result
, they do not need to go anywhere, just a phone connected to the Internet, they could know a lot of news. In conclusion, While it is true that social
media
has some negative effects on
people
’s
life
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, I believe that it helps a lot
for
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human
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in providing
information
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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