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Nowadays, social media affects people’s lives significantly. What impact does this have on the society? Is it a negative or a positive development?

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The
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 has a significant impact on the way
people
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 live their lives. While others said that social
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 brings positive effects, I would hold the belief that it has many negative effects on life. Social
media
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 has several negatives for users.
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,
media
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 influences
people
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 into buying products that they
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don
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 not need to buy through advertisements. Many
people
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 after watching commercials on television think that they should buy promotional products.
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, they make impulse purchases without realizing the need for these items.
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, most consumers replace appliances in their homes after seeing
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an advertisement
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advertisement
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 for a new product without thinking that their old one is good.
Secondly
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,
people
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 could read false
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, which makes them have
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look
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looks
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.
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, television
broadcasting
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 false
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 that could confuse the public.
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, they could not come to a conclusion because they could not tell what is correct
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 and what is bad
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. Social
media
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 has several positives for users.
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,
people
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 could update
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 from anywhere and whenever they want.
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, regularly updated
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 would help them make decisions to improve their lives,
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 as enhancing home security bef, preventing natural disasters, and so on.
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, the
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 makes it easier for
people
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 to find
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.
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, they do not need to go anywhere, just a phone connected to the Internet, they could know a lot of news. In conclusion, While it is true that social
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 has some negative effects on
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’s
life
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, I believe that it helps a lot
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human
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 in providing
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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