In some countries, fast food restaurants and supermarkets give money to schools to promote their products .Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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life ,It helps them grow physically and mentally ,but nowadays these

school

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started promoting fast

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because they are funded by

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the supermarket

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fast food

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restaurant

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blind follow leads them toward blind well it affects their health , academic performance

decrease

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, it affects the health of

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. Most of the

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scholars

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are dependent on their elders for their growth , even they are immature to make a section from

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of choices for

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by promoting

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food

their immunity power will

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and they suffer from various diseases

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of healthy

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promoting quick foods for their greediness of money , students will think that these foods are good for their health

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trend not only affects

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of scholars ,

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will

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pay for it , due to more and more youngsters

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unhealthy

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their academic performance will become poor , a survey was conducted by state bodies in order to examine the cause of bad academic results the reason was that consumption of fast

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their scores because these foods wouldn't contain any

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nutrition

due to lack of

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nutrition

their memory power is decreased At

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I conclude that

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these steps will push younger

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generation

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path,

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they even don't know that they are propelled toward wrong path their future

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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In some countries, fast food restaurants and supermarkets give money to schools to promote their products .Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Some people think that we should replace old buildings and houses in cities with more modern buildings. Other people think we should protect old buildings. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people think that it is more important to plant trees in open areas of town and cities than to build more housing . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Overall, men are more satisfied with local conditions than women.