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The bar graph shows the figure of one country`s export earnings in five sectors from 2015 to 2016 and the table shows the percentage change in each sector of exports during the same period. Overall, it is clear that the export earnings of all sectors

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increased except for

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and jewellery sector.

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, the percentage change values from 2015 to 2016 in

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sector

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the largest among them. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that the petroleum products category was the highest export income more than 60

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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In many places women are taking jobs which are traditionally done by men. What do you think make these change happen. What's your opinion about it.

Fully explain your ideas

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to the advanced technology which can prevent and solve the crime. Do you agree or disagree?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Many people believe that modern technology has brought people together but other say it has driven us apart. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.