In many places women are taking jobs which are traditionally done by men. What do you think make these change happen. What's your opinion about it.

The bar graph shows the figure of one country`s export earnings in five sectors from 2015 to 2016 and the table shows the percentage change in each sector of exports during the same period. Overall, it is clear that the export earnings of all sectors
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increased except for
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and jewellery sector.
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, the percentage change values from 2015 to 2016 in
textile
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sector
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the largest among them. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that the petroleum products category was the highest export income more than 60
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