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So,Almost everybody nowadays is found using personal vehicle for travelling purpose. What are the reasons of this increasing trend? Explain what negative outcomes may be faced in the society due to this.

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In our
society
 today
people
 are more comfortable going on trips with their private cars, it has become a normal lifestyle for so many.
This
 can
also
 have a bad impact
in
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our
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society
 where we live
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why
people
 prefer going with their private cars and
also
 the damage it can cause to our
society
. Driving your personal car when you decide to go on a journey can be more relaxing and fun, most especially when you are embarking on a journey with your family, you will not be restricted to the
numbers
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 of luggage you choose to go with. You can decide what time will be convenient for you to start your trip. Many
people
 enjoy stopping on the road to get some food and soft drink while
traveling
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, you can decide on what you want to listen
too
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 while driving. So many
people
 feel
more safe
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 while driving themselves.
People
 have so many reasons why they feel more relaxed and comfortable using their private car when embarking on a journey.
This
also
 has some
damages
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in
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our
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society
 we live in. The government provides so many means of transportation so as to reduce traffic and accidents on the road, transportation is another means
which
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 the government make money. If we keep having more private cars on the road it will increase unemployment for the masses and
this
 can result
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 more crime in our
society
 today.
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