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Some people think that excessive use of smartphones badly affects teenagers' literacy skills. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #smartphones #teenagers #literacy #skills
there is no doubt that
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 of teens spend their
time
 in social meddle
this
 affects about their reading and writing skills is considered as one of most controversial issues
to day
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.In
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 essay, I am going to
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examine
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 phenomenon from both
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 and draw my
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conclusion
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,in terms of problems
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affect their
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 grades in
school
 when they spend
time
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 smartphones made them
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 in
school
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 a lot of skills.The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that
last
 yera oxford university Research about the grades for students compires between the past in present and the result become in the past it was the highest grades from present,To illustrate there is no exist in phones
also
 in past the development the skills for teenagers to become geniues in
school
,in other world spend a lot of
time
 in phones it will cause them problems for instace,visual impairment and money Diseases the human in goes on.
first
 of all, the parents when confrontaion condition appear
this
 start to dell about
for example
, Organizing their childern's
time
 allow for the kids to ues there moble
phone
 in day maximum fifve hours only
then
 spend some
time
 foucsing about theri studing,in other world Reward them when obeying,in other world be firendly with them some situetion teenagers spend
time
 ues
phone
 they want to talk with someone discovery about their idea,it is
also
 possible to consider it with the opposing case,A
second
 point is that ues the
phone
 long period able to make a person loes his skils and talents, in fact, the a better Solution is Management their
time
 it not only for the teens for any one,In conclusion, althought
This
 issue, the negatives outweigh the positives,
Therefore
, in my personal opinion I agrement with
this
 uesing a
phone
 insignificant things and a waste of
time
Furthermore
 impact on their
school
 life deeply literacy there skils
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