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In cities and towns all over the world the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem.

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Undoubtedly the increasing
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 congestion has become a huge issue in many countries in the world. In
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 I will discuss the main reasons for
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 trend and some measures to relax the issue. To start with, it is vital to discuss the matters which pertain to heavy
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 in certain areas. As I feel, the
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 reason is cars and other personal forms of transportation
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 as motorbikes and vans are no longer luxuries. Those can be afforded by many families. So people tend to use private transit methods as far as they could. The
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 factor for rising movement conditions is declined reliability of public
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 as buses and trains. These methods of
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 sometimes lag behind the schedule or do not turn up for a few turns. Funding for public
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 increasingly becomes a burden on the government.
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, increased worker mobility has influenced people to travel in their own vehicles rather than taking buses. Access to the workplace or school is much easier and quicker by personal car.
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 growing
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 conditions have raised many issues and it has to be controlled methodically. The government could encourage commuters to benefit
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 public
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 system, by imposing a fine for driving motorcars during peak hours. A successful example of
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 is the congestion charge scheme in London which has immensely reduced inner-city
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.
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 walking areas for pedestrians could be declared and restrict motorists to drive through. In ,addition the government can introduce an incentive scheme for
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 of personal vehicles during a particular time in the day. In Conclusion,the increasing
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 should be addressed with proper measures of control as it poses many difficulties to the populace in general.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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