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People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This has made our lives generally more comfortable, but many traditional values and customs have been lost and this is a pity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary era, civilians are
inclining
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towards
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 bringing all luxury items to their premises. A bunch of
people
 believe that hard work allows you to purchase all items of comfort but the cultural values are being compromised.
To begin
 with, in a cut-throat world, it has become extremely important to have a healthy competition with your fellow employee.
However
, the competition is now no more healthy
instead
people
 are jealous of other's progress. To compete with them, folks are inclined toward unethical ways.
For instance
, our traditional values teach us not to bribe anyone. But to approve the business tender, business owners are willing to share profit with the authorized person.
On the contrary
, not everyone has the same thought process. A few
people
 are still concerned about their morality and responsibility towards society.
For instance
, in today’s modern era, the youth is inclined toward jazz and contemporary music. But despite extremely good skills, a few
people
 have still continued to pursue their careers as
a
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folk singers, or
a
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folk dancers. They are not only helping keep our history alive but
also
 they are helping it move.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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