Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The World Cup football and the Olympics are held worldwide with great national support and expectations. As a fan of those competitions, I agree with the idea that sporting events can be necessary for international relations and national unity, but only partially, because
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events can have unintended effects on relationships between countries.
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of all, the World Cup, Olympics and other international
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work for easing tensions among different nations.
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, South and North Korea have football
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regularly
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nations a chance to understand each other . In the mid
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North Korean supporters came to South Korea with the footballers and they were very excited during the sporting events. Even if it sounds ridiculous, many South Koreans were quite surprised at that moment when North Koreans shouted and cried during the match. We all realized that they were very normal sports fans even though they were occasionally very secretive. Through
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sports,
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divided nations could reduce their political and ideological tensions and could feel
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patriotic unity.
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, some sports matches can make international relations worse.
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, football or baseball
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between Korea and Japan are always big matches in
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countries where . Sometimes, after the matches, the
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rivals blame each other and their patriotic emotions explode in an aggressive way.
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is that the troubles caused by losing
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affect the players directly. In conclusion, I think that international sporting occasions can be one
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the good
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to ease tensions or to release patriotism safely.
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, I believe that
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can not be the fundamental
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sound patriotism or peaceful international relations.
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