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Some people think that excessive use of smartphones badly affects teenagers' literacy skills. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #smartphones #teenagers #literacy #skills
Nowadays mobile phones got
the
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 main role in our day-to-day life. Especially,
younger
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the younger
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generation
 who keep using
smartphones
tend
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 to feel more problems
in
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 their
literacy
 when they need to write something without the help of their
smartphones
. Some folk see
this
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 no issue of
smartphones
, but
individual
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an individual
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 approach
towards
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literacy
. Let's see
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both sides and conclude with
reasonable
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 outcome. I was part of
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 educational background where
smartphones
 were not our main way of communication, so it was long emails or letters and that's how I was really under pressure to write without mistakes or having them as less as possible. But even
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times
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 at university I started to notice that
younger
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the younger
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generation
 did not put a lot of focus
towards
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literacy
.
They
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 point of view was
focusing
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to focus
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 on
main
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 point as simple as it's possible. But these days I see that my younger employees are focused less and less on grammar or the way their message sounds, and it's starting to be a problem even for
myself
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me
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 as I need to
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 all the time. So, from my personal
perspective
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 I feel that
smartphones
 are leading to
literacy
 issues for teenagers, but at the same
time
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 the perception of receivers
also
 changed a lot. Nowadays I can observe how big-name magazines can skip some typos and mistakes in their
communicaton
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communication
. To sum up, we as
older
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generation
 need to find out the best possible way to impact
younger
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the younger
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generation
 in terms of improving their
literacy
 through the same
smartphones
. Leading developers should focus more on
introducting
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introducing
 applications which
also
 support
this
 thinking.
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