Some people think that parents should limit their children’s time to watch TV and play computer games and encourage them to read books. Do you agree or disagree?

Entertainment is
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necessary for everyone whether it is for the
childeren
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important as well and while
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doing
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activities parents should have to decide
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schedule for their children for book reading. I completely agree with
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statement. Modern technologies
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the pupils to
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old methods of being engaged. Decades ago, students
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enough
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of entertainment.
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that time, they love to read books and
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love to play group games.
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, watching TV shows or playing computer games there is less chance of
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something indeed the eyes will get tired and
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too. Book reading help to ameliorate the skills
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and Physical improvement
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only
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while playing outdoor sports.
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this
statement is some TV programs found helpful for
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growth and they can learn easily while watching.
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, computer games
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the children to think sharp but
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of students get addicted
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these sort of activities.
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game ever, if a child
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addicted to it
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tough
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the game without completing the task. In
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brief
it makes the pupil devoted. In conclusion, it is crystal clear reading books
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the best way to learn
in contrast
doing above activities have some
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negative
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children
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growth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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