some people think that dangerous sports should be banned,but others think the people should have freedom to choose sports activities discuss both views and give your opinion.

While
it is believed that risky
sports
should be restricted, others hold that
people
have the total freedom to choose what they want to practice as a sport. I think that
people
are willingly throwing themselves into danger and their life at stake , just to feel an ephemeral satisfaction. On the one hand, many athletes
had
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faced serious injuries or even died
while
practising their
sports
activities
letting
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broken-hearted families and friends behind, for the above situation, some
people
are demanding the banning of
such
life hazardous
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activities.
In other words
, individuals tend to put themselves into extremely life-threatening situations just because they somehow feel alive, that they have accomplished something only few could have the gut to think about
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or maybe because they are simply ignorant.
For instance
, many
lives
were lost and many completely healthy athletes became disabled after car racing crashes, yet we still see the unreasonable hype
this
sport still gets.
Therefore
, more
lives
will be lost in the future, just for the sake of personal satisfaction or getting attention, if we do not forbid perilous exercises.
On the other hand
, others may argue that life is full of risks that even supposedly safe
sports
might lead to serious injuries. To put it differently, the freedom of choice should not be taken from mature adults
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are capable of weighing the
benefit
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and risks of a certain sport just because rare accidents can happen.
For example
, these activities are usually practised by professionals and under their supervision in case of any accidents.
Consequently
, no one has the right to deprive children of their future dreams or forbid
people
from an activity they consider part of their
lives
. In conclusion, banning dangerous
sports
is supported by some individuals
due to
the endless serious accidents they might occur, others deem that
people
are mostly aware of those possibilities and have every right to choose what is suitable for them or not. I indeed hold that
people
's
lives
and well-being should be prioritised and protected even if that meant taking away their freedom.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prohibit
  • autonomy
  • adrenaline rush
  • resilience
  • subjective
  • informed decision
  • extreme sports
  • hazardous
  • regulation
  • legislation
  • thrill-seeking
  • risk assessment
  • safety measures
  • protective gear
  • inherent risks
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