There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?
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issue.
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it is clear that
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noise
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pollution
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cities
' population. Apparently, a vast number of villagers leave their hometowns Use synonyms
due to
the lack of job opportunities and the provision of suitable services, leading to becoming industrial places of the big Linking Words
city
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cities
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, a large number of people are commuting the southwest of Tehran, so, it would be much noisier. Linking Words
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cities
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regions nosier, especially in rush hours, in comparison with residential Linking Words
areas
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a disturbing issue, some solutions could be adopted by governments. First of all, some services should be provided to facilitate living in small Linking Words
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areas
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For instance
, if entertainment places, advanced Healthcare systems, shopping centres, etc. were constructed in Linking Words
such
places, people would not presumably immigrate to megacities. Linking Words
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, governments would be able to provide the youngest in small Linking Words
cities
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cities
.
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Task Response
The essay addressed the prompt by analyzing the causes of noise pollution in urban areas and proposing solutions. However, the response lacks depth and fails to fully articulate the complexity of the issue.
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The introduction and conclusion are present and provide a basic framework for the essay. However, the development of ideas within paragraphs lacks coherence and logical consistency. A clearer structure and better use of linking words are needed to improve cohesion.
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