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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life in other planets, some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing problems of public. To what extent you agree?

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Many
people
 believe that a huge amount of expenditure is being used in search of life
in
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 other planets whereas, others claim that governing bodies should utilize
this
money
 for solving
citizens
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citizens'
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 problems.
However
, I completely agree with the notion that authorities should spend more
for
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 the welfare of
its
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their
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people
instead
 of
this
 kind of
research
. Nowadays, many nations are providing huge funds for the
research
 of life on other planets. Many scientists are looking for the availability of water and oxygen
on
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in
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 the various parts of the globe.
For
instance
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 many countries
such
 as USA and China have launched many spaceships on
the
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Mars, in search that if
survival
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the survival
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 of humans is possible outside the earth.
However
, still the results and data obtained are not significant and do not reflect any positive signs.
Therefore
, if
this
money
is spend
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 on the public needs it would be more fruitful.
On the other hand
, there are
lot
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 of requirements of the citizens
such
 as healthcare facilities, good transportation, daily needs and better salaries.
Instead
 of wasting
money
in
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such
 kind of
researches
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, it should be utilized for serving the
people
 of
nation
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the nation
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. One of the best examples of
this
 can be seen in Korea where
government
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 has raised the public funding
and and
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is using
this
money
 for the construction of advanced hospitals in the rural areas so that its individuals can be benefitted. Henceforth, authorities should spend the resources on the essential things which are required for the prosperity of the country. To conclude, authorities should spend on the
research
 work and discoveries but only
for
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 those which have definite results and which are beneficial for
the nations growth
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the growth of the nation
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.
Therefore
, I firmly believe that
huge
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 amount should not be used on unnecessary
research
instead
 it should be used for the welfare of the
people
.
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