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Food can be produced much more cheaply today because of improved fertilizers and better technology. However, some of the methods used to do this may be dangerous to human health and may have negative effects on local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#food #fertilizers #technology #methods #health #effects #communities
In the contemporary world, agriculture technology has developed exponentially to improve
production
 and bring down costs dramatically.
This
 is due to the technological advancements in
inputs
such
 as utilizing advanced types of
fertilizer
 and
chemicals
 that are highly effective on pests and diseases. These
inputs
 can be injurious to human health due to residual heavy metals that come in with the crops causing carcinogenic conditions in human society. I totally agree with the above scenario which will be discussed in brief in the following essay. With the green revolution that occurred in the past
food
production
 has increased and as a
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result cost has decreased drastically. One of the reasons for the high crop
production
 is the application of advanced
fertilizer
 and chemical types. In order to obtain higher
production
 cultivators apply large quantities of
fertilizer
 and
chemicals
 and more frequently beyond the local recommendations.
Additionally
, agricultural
production
 has mechanized replacing the large human cost involved.
This
 has
negatively
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effect
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 on the incurred cost and
production
 units are able to supply the
food
 much cheaper.
Although
 the new
inputs
 have a high response rate they
also
 have a high content of heavy metals. These metals and other harmful
chemicals
 are channelled through the
food
 chains and accumulate in humans. These harmful substances can cause cancer and other medical conditions to us. In some areas in
USA
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 the weedicide, "
Glyphostate
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Glyphosate
" was banned as many people who consumed the specific vegetable were affected with cancers. To conclude, modern-day
fertilizer
 and
chemicals
 have improved crop
production
 and made
food
 cheaper but it
also
 has affected the human race by causing numerous medical conditions.
Therefore
, I agree with the above and
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 that the
inputs
 should be utilized in a controlled manner.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • agricultural production
  • affordable
  • accessible
  • significant
  • detrimentally
  • chemical fertilizers
  • pesticides
  • crop yield
  • soil degradation
  • water pollution
  • toxic substances
  • food chain
  • health hazards
  • Genetically Modified Organisms (GMOs)
  • unforeseen
  • long-term safety
  • intensive farming practices
  • cheap food
  • overexploitation
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • food security
  • social and economic impact
  • small-scale farmers
  • agribusinesses
  • livelihoods
  • urban migration
  • erosion
  • local cultures
  • traditions
  • regulation
  • sustainable agricultural practices
  • mitigate
  • efficiencies
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