You recently received a letter from a fiend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter - say why he/she would not enjoy goint to college - explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her - suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

Dear Anna, I hope you are doing well, as well
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family too. Thank you for your consideration. Going to school is probably a good asset to start a good
future
since it gives you a higher chance of getting a good
job
. But according to your age of a
growing
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up woman of 22, you will face some kind of problem like harassment from other students since your age and height are big enough to be in college; In another hand, you should know that nowadays, studying is very expensive and as far I remember you are an orphan and your grandparents can not afford the school expenses. I will advise you to look for a
job
. Let me give you my
points
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of view.
First
of all, you will gain experience which will be helpful for your
future
; working means practice so you are going to learn and know how to do things. Practice is more valuable than theories.
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you will gain money for supporting your grandparents and
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the same occasion save for your own
future
life. As
job
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, I will suggest you
to
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go for
bakery
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a bakery
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and pastry. If my memory is good, you used to say that you love everything relating to the patisserie shop. By engaging yourself in
this
activity domain, I see a lot of advantages for you like: learning how to cook different
cake
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and sweets, having an acknowledge about how to manage a store or shop
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baker
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a baker
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,
interacting
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and interacting
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directly with the customers which will help you to develop your communication skill, and of course gain money and save some part in the target to be the owner of your own shop at the end of your formation. Just I want to prevent you that nothing is easy
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cooking for
public
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, but since it is your passion you will be in a domain where you can use your urge imagination and creativity. And with my managerial
capacity
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I can help you in the
future
to
expend
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expand
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your brand in different areas why not countries. In
conclusion
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going to school is good but getting a
job
especially
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the one you like is far fair for your life journey and as your friend, I will be there to support you. Regards, Ines.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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