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You recently did a short course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter Describe what you enjoyed about the course Say how much cooking you have done since the course Suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer.

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Dear Madam, I am writing to submit my feedback about the cookery course and I am so glad to
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me and asked me about my feedback .I could not describe how it was exhilarating Experience and interesting. The participants were the same age and
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smile
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 faces which
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are my reasons
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enjoying
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.They have
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 of joking
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.We
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shared our experiences together and provided us tips and
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 on cooking.
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, I enjoyed
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learning
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 international cousins and how decoration
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 birthday cake,
this
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most
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 interesting thing.
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cause
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 I began to cook
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 home
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delivery
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 fast food.Even more, I have been starting cooking
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 my family
A
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healthy stuff
such
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. kindly I would like
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you to offer more cookery courses on
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international food ,types of cakes
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appetizer
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. I hope my letter covers all your
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 and if you have another question don’t hesitate to contact
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me Faithfully yours. Enas

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coherence cohesion
Make sure to provide a clear and logical structure to your letter, with each paragraph containing just one main idea or topic.
task achievement
Adopt a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter suitable for the recipient and purpose of the letter.
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Ensure that the purpose of the letter is clear and each requirement of the task is fully addressed for an effective response.
coherence cohesion
Use transitions and connectors effectively to ensure smooth progression between ideas.
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Revise and eliminate grammatical errors for enhanced clarity and professionalism.
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Consider incorporating a more formal greeting and closing to enhance the appropriateness of the letter to the context.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Culinary skills
  • Gastronomy
  • Recipe repertoire
  • Hands-on experience
  • Gourmet
  • Cuisine
  • Master chef
  • Food preparation
  • Cooking techniques
  • Flavor profile
  • Culinary arts
  • Ingredient selection
  • Diverse palate
  • Seasoning and spices
  • Baking
  • Roasting
  • Sauteing
  • Food presentation
  • Nutritional value
  • Sous-chef
  • Culinary journey
  • Taste buds
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