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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter - Explain why you would like the job - Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ - Say how you would spend your free time why you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in the position advertised in the Yurtici newspaper in your house in Australia. I need money to continue my Master's degree at university, so I have taken a break of 1 year to work after graduation.
Although
 my parents support me financially, I want to choose a job that I can do. I graduated from the university and my field was early childhood care and education. Since I worked as a trainee in a day-care centre for 6 months during my studies,
this
 allowed me to put my theoretical knowledge into practice and
this
 experience sets me apart from other applicants. I prefer to live in Australia because I can speak and improve my English skills there. English is an international language and contributes a lot to my career plans.
Also
, I can meet new people and a new culture and I love to spend my free time doing new things. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Yusuf Özdemir,
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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