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some people think computers and the internet are important in childrens study but others think students can learn more effectively in schools and with teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinin?

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The
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Study
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study
 is an important aspect for
children
. There have been different opinions about the
way
 of
study
. Some suggest that using technology,
such
 as the internet would be great. Whereas other groups of people believe,that a
study
 in the classroom by teachers is an effective
way
. Both opinions are discussed in
further
 assay and state my own opinion. On one side, there are groups who think that for child
study
 online sources are valuable. There are many apps which are now available to help with learning.
Moreover
,
children
 find it an interesting
way
 to learn because of visual, three dimensional and colourful images. The Internet has a wide range of data that one access anywhere, that
way
 it is not set a limit to learning things that
children
 can learn by themselves. On the other side, there are people who still believe that sitting in classrooms and learning under the guidance of teachers are the most effective methods for a child to
study
.
For example
, they can do
practise
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practice
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 lessons and help to improve, when they find something difficult to understand.
Moreover
, in ,schools they learn well behaviour as well as discipline. In conclusion, there is a different
opinions
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opinion
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 about
children
's
study
, whether it is the best for classroom learning or through the computers.
However
, in my opinion , it is important for to one can go to school and
study
also
 nowadays schools are adopting some technologies to make it interesting for them to learn.
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