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There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

#noise #places #cities
It can be observed in many common areas in the cities sound pollution has
incresed
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increased
 to a high level. Some of the root causes for
this
 issue can be identified as
development
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the development
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 of townships and urbanization. As
this
 is injurious to humans and nature, control measures should be taken to control sound levels by implementing sound control and implementing regulatory policies. Noise pollution has become one of the primary issues around the world. A key factor is the development
work
 that
take
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 place in cities, where various constructions are taken place. Due to the construction
work
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 many workers are drawn
in to
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into
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 the area and a variety of machines ,
such
 as cement mixtures and trucks combine to complete the
work
.
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Because
 of high activity among man and
machines
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 it can be observed that noise increases in public areas.
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Furthermore
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Further more
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, people are drawn
in to
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into
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 the cities from rural areas
finding
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work
 and business.
This
 increases the human population in the towns and during the
off time
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 these people get together in common places,
such
 as
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