Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult to live such as Sahara desert or Antarctica. Do advantages outweight the disadvantage of live there .

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smaller and smaller because of the advanced technology and transportation system, people have been visiting over any place around the world and even Sahara dessert and
Antarcitca
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Antarctica
where extreme weather conditions and hostile
enviroments
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environments
environment
make them so hard to live in but tourists around the world who like challengings are coming more and more year after year. I personally think
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and cons of
this
phenomenon are generally equal and describe them in
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essay.
First
of all, there are
great
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amount of advantages ascribe to
this
case and one of the chief merits is gaining
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myriad
amounts of
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that cannot
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even imagined. Due to the abnormal conditions of
weather
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of those
places
, plants and creatures living
in
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there are not
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with
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normal ones that can see
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in our daily life and very interesting.
Also
,
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and cultures of the natives are worth noting.
Moreover
, visiting
to
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those
places
will feel like visiting
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another planets
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because of the unique and extraordinary environments and
this
may suit
for
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travellers who seek
for
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thrills and
excitements
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. Turning to the disadvantages, it is obvious that people with low resistance will not likely
to
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travel to those
places
in the sense that their surroundings are rough and harsh, and sudden
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in temperatures
which
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can lead them to
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diseases and illnesses.
In addition
, even for
healty
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healthy
persons, there are so many difficulties waiting for them to overcome.
For example
, it may be easy to travel to those
places
but it would be really difficult to travel from one place to another in those
places
and foods and drinks are really scarce and will need to bring as much as that can be carried. In a nutshell, I pen down saying that
benefits
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the benefits
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and drawbacks of
this
phenomenon
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seems
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to be equal because
of
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the experiences and
knowledges
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knowledge
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that will
be get
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are promising to beat the vast amounts of obstacles.
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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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