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Some people think that universities should provide graduate with the knowledge and the skills needed in the workplace. Other think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What is your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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Education plays a pivotal role in shaping the professional
life
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 of a person. There are some
people
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 who think that gaining
knowledge
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 in the same
field
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 always fetch fruitful results in future, while others opine it and believe that college should focus on teaching all aspects of
life
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 regardless of one single
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.
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 essay will state why it is beneficial to get an education in the same
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 and what universities can do to provide appropriate
knowledge
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 about a particular
subject
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. On one hand, by providing graduates with the suitable
knowledge
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 of the course, some
people
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 think universities can help them master in their specific fields.
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,
people
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 who study only those
subjects
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 that are related to their future pursuits are more dedicated and focused in their
life
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.
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, 90% of
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 in America have mastery in their work because they have studied and gained experience in the same
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.
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 not only makes them confident in their work but
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 provide them with success in their
life
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 because they are masters of their
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.
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, others are against it and they prefer university should provide access to all the
subjects
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 so that children can learn different things in a single course. To be more specific, educating them on different
subjects
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 will provide a wide range of choices for their careers. To illustrate, a report in the London times has shown that
people
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 who study different
subjects
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 their graduation usually have various aspects to choose
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, a commerce student after graduation has a huge list of jobs for which he/she can opt. I am an advocate of the statement that universities should only provide pupils with the specific
knowledge
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 of the
subject
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 which is helpful for their workplace as it will help them to attain more
knowledge
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 of the
subject
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 and they can focus more on the same. In conclusion, it would be great if a person gets mastery in their own
field
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 else it will not be wrong to say that a Jack of all trades, is a master in none. If one wants to gain
knowledge
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 in a specific
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, a person should start it from a mere small age and it will only happen if the university provides them with some
knowledge
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. I, strongly recommend that the university should work on making
people
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 valuable in their own
field
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 by providing them with the same
knowledge
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 that they need for their future occupations.
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