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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try an improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #situation #job #shortage #money #improve #situations
Happiness lies in accepting your
situations
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 and moving on with it.Should people embrace their
life
 ,the way it is irrespective of
your
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 employment status or financial situation ?Or fight the system to earn a better
life
?My essay discusses both
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ways and
give
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 my unbiased opinion.
To begin
 with,humans have a tendency to get accustomed to a given situation over a period of time and find it comfortable.
For example
,men from the older generation, who had a family at a very young age often laden with responsibilities ,preferred joining
work
 early to provide for their family despite the meagre income and inadequate
situsations
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situations
 at
work
.Struggling to gain more money can sometimes
dissappoint
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disappoint
 a person who looks for
a
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equilibrium in his
life
.
Hence
 ,they tend to accept their
life
 at present ,
inspite
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in spite
 of an unhappy working environment and poor
monetory
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monetary
 options.
In contrast
,a certain set of people do believe in fighting the odds to dream of a better future.They fight the system and
work
 harder in order to attain a better appraisal at
work
 and higher economic achievements.
For instance
,
youth
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 of the present generation ,prefer stalling marriage for higher studies and getting a better job
instead
 of
joing
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joining
doing
a
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mediocre employment soon after graduation.
This
 has shown in a better outcome with regard to
standard
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 of living and optimistic perspective in
life
. To conclude,people do face difficult situations in
life
 and some may tend to either accept their current situations while the others ,may completely face
it
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 with courage and overcome it ,to achieve a better
life
.I believe that it depends on the person and his individual situation in
life
 , where he takes either one as a decision.
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