Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with

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There are different types of people in
the
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society. Some truly prefer to explore and try new
things
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in
life
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, some are content with the diversity they have. People tend to stick to their traditions and close themselves to new opportunities while others
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connections to their traditions and just want new
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in
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. In my opinion, both should be applicable where there should
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be room for new
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. In the following
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you will find two paragraphs explaining the reasons
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two different types of preferences. Tradition determines character and character determines a person’s standing in
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society. A simple
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choice or location to live
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appease or stress a person if they are outside of
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comfort zone. We grow up with the
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of our elders and live in a familiar environment throughout our childhood and as a
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we get used to the stimulus of these environmental conditions. They become part of us and to be happy or to feel connected we need those elements in our
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. Exploring new
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enables a better view of what we already have and, in some cases, lets us
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value our traditions even more. Development and advancement, one or both of them are
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in either religion or evolution. Becoming better with each generation is actually very important for human civilization. Visiting new countries and experiencing different
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or
culture
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can help someone to value their own
food
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or
culture
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more. The more common way around is,
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a new
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can help
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the positive side of the new and improve the old. In conclusion, both ways are required to keep a healthy society intact. Traditional
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is required to keep the
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stable and consistent. Improvement is
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required as all
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tries to thrive and improve. With new information and
stimulus
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life
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can develop the
culture
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or even in some cases correct the wrong ways. Tradition is important to base our development and new
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are required to enrich
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tradition and develop it even more.
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