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In marriages today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that
in
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institution
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an institution
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 called marriage
both
 the husband and wife should earn and contribute
for
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 attaining a good family
life
. I completely agree with
this
 notion as due to increased expenditures and high living standards nowadays, couples should share equal responsibilities for running a family. In
this
 modern world, due to
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hike
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hikes
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 in prices in each and every
sector
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 it is not practically possible to run a family
single handed
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single-handed
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. Due to
fall
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 in
economy
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the economy
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 in various
countries
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,countries
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 everything is affected which has
subsequently
lead
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 to more rise in expenditure as compared to previous years.
For instance
, in a recent study conducted in India,
majority
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 of the ladies in the cities
as well as countryside
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, as well as countryside area,
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area
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areas
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 are working for providing better living for their families and
this
 data of earning women is double in comparison to the figures from the past years.
Therefore
,
both
 the spouses should earn, so that their
life
 could be balanced and
they
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apply
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do not suffer from
economic
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the economic
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 crisis.
On the other hand
, if
both
 the partners will work and earn they can
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manage
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mange
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manage
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 to have high living standards and they can provide all the amenities to their families.
For example
, nowadays in most of the countries
such
 as
USA
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the USA
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, Korea and
UK
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the UK
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 , there has been a substantial rise in the
tution
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tuition
 fee in most of the
top rated
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top-rated
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 institutions and with the earnings of
single
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a single
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individual
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,individual
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 it is not possible to provide admissions in high rated schools and universities.
However
, with the combined efforts and earnings of
both
 the
spouses
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,spouses
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 it is possible
forthem
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for them
 to provide
good
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a good
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life
 and good
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education
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eduction
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education
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 to their children. To conclude, in marriage if a couple earns together and
distribute
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distributes
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 all responsibilities equally including the financial sharing, it will definitely contribute to
better
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 future.
Hence
 , I firmly believe that
both
 the partners should earn so that they can have
prosperous
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a prosperous
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 family
life
.
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