Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays,
computers
have an integral part of our daily lives
especially
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at work and
schools
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. It has helped in making work easier and faster. Some people believe that
computers
should be used in classrooms and uses
the
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various
computer
software as a method of teaching
students
directly.
However
, some are on the fence
of
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using
computers
in
schools
as they think they carry
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degree of
risks
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to young learners. Personally, I think it is harmful
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students
to use
computer
lessons in
schools
. Recently, there has been a surge of work from home jobs as the pandemic hits and there is an
increase
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number of people who spends their
time
in front of the
computer
.
Students
need to have a wide understanding of how the
computer
works. In
this
sense, exposure to
computer
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computers
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and technology will aid
students
in creating
foundation
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for success. Another thing is that it encourages spontaneous learning. As
students
have access to the net, it can help them in investigating various topics that
interests
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them.
For instance
, a student
that is
intereseted
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interested
more
about
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dinosaurs can easily research
this
topic and can read articles and publish books or watch a supplementary Youtube video on it.
On the other hand
, using
computers
in school have some risks associated with it. It can isolate a student from others because it links through a social network online. They can
also
spend more
time
using the devices and have lesser
times
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interacting with their peers. In my experience, as the classes were moved online, I may
had
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more
time
spent at home but my
time
interacting and socialising with my peers decrease a lot. Another disadvantage of using
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computer
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is that it decreases creativity among
students
as
sunjects
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subjects
already have
a pre-made activities
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without the
students
having to solve problems in creative and imaginative ways. In conclusion, utilising
computer
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in
schools
are
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advantageous as it aids learners to create
foundation
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a foundation
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for their achievements and can aid them in learning more
however
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, it can be detrimental as well as it isolates them from others and stunts creative and imaginative skills.
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