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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
computers
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 have an integral part of our daily lives
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 at work and
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schools
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. It has helped in making work easier and faster. Some people believe that
computers
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 should be used in classrooms and uses
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various
computer
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 software as a method of teaching
students
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 directly.
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, some are on the fence
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 using
computers
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 in
schools
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 as they think they carry
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 degree of
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 to young learners. Personally, I think it is harmful
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students
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 to use
computer
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 lessons in
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. Recently, there has been a surge of work from home jobs as the pandemic hits and there is an
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 number of people who spends their
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 in front of the
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.
Students
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 need to have a wide understanding of how the
computer
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 works. In
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 sense, exposure to
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computer
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 and technology will aid
students
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 in creating
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 for success. Another thing is that it encourages spontaneous learning. As
students
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 have access to the net, it can help them in investigating various topics that
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 them.
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, a student
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intereseted
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interested
 more
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 dinosaurs can easily research
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 topic and can read articles and publish books or watch a supplementary Youtube video on it.
On the other hand
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, using
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 in school have some risks associated with it. It can isolate a student from others because it links through a social network online. They can
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 spend more
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 using the devices and have lesser
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 interacting with their peers. In my experience, as the classes were moved online, I may
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 more
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 spent at home but my
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 interacting and socialising with my peers decrease a lot. Another disadvantage of using
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a computer
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computer
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 is that it decreases creativity among
students
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 as
sunjects
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subjects
 already have
a pre-made activities
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 without the
students
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 having to solve problems in creative and imaginative ways. In conclusion, utilising
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computer
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the computer
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 in
schools
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are
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 advantageous as it aids learners to create
foundation
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a foundation
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 for their achievements and can aid them in learning more
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however
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, it can be detrimental as well as it isolates them from others and stunts creative and imaginative skills.
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