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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
computers
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 have an integral part of our daily lives ,especially at work and school. It has helped in making work easier and faster. Some people believe that
computers
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 should be used in classrooms and uses various
computer
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 software as a method of teaching
students
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 directly.
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, some are on the fence about using
computers
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 in schools as they think they carry a specific degree of risk to young learners. Personally, I think it is harmful to
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 to use
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 lessons in schools. Recently, there has been a surge of work from home jobs as the pandemic hits and there is an increasing number of people who spends their
time
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 in front of the
computer
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.
Students
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 need to have a wide understanding of how the
computer
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 works. In
this
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 sense, exposure to
computers
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 and technology will aid
students
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 in creating a foundation for success. Another thing is that it encourages spontaneous learning. As
students
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 have access to the net, it can help them in investigating various topics that interest them.
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, a student
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 interested more in dinosaurs can easily research
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 topic and can read articles and publish books or watch a supplementary Youtube video on it.
On the other hand
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, using
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 in school have some risks associated with it. It can isolate a student from others because it links through a social network online. They can
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 spend more
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 using the devices and have lesser
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 interacting with their peers. In my experience, as the classes were moved online, I may have more
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 spent at home but my
time
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 interacting and socialising with my peers decrease a lot. Another disadvantage of using
computers
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 is that it decreases creativity among
students
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 as subjects already have pre-made activities without the
students
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 having to solve problems in creative and imaginative ways. In conclusion, utilising the
computer
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 in schools is advantageous as it aids learners to create a foundation for their achievements and can aid them in learning more ,
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, it can be detrimental as well as it isolates them from others and stunts creativity and imaginative skills.
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