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Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #languages #schools #force
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It is debatable that
schools
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 should not include a
second
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language
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 in their compulsory curriculum since it is challenging for
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 to learn foreign
languages
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. Some feel that forcing incapable
students
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 to learn foreign
languages
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 cause demotivating them and putting them in
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situation
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. In my opinion, considering the positive effects
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 as educating open-minded perspectives and job opportunities in the future, all
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 should be taught a
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language
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 at
schools
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.
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language
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 is intimately related to culture, foreign
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education
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 is not just
language
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education
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, but
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 cultural
education
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. To be specific, young children can broaden their horizons by experiencing the way people from other countries think and knowledge of other cultures through learning foreign
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. One study,
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, shows
students
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 who have experienced foreign
languages
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 tend to understand other cultures and have open attitudes.
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 demonstrates how important learning different
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 are for a student despite
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their
language
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 learning capacity.
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, if
schools
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 do not enforce
language
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education
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 just because of
lack
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 of children’s learning ability, young people who are not affordable to be educated privately have fewer chances to get promising jobs after graduation. It is obviously true that in modern society, more and more companies are looking for
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applicants who completed foreign
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 courses. According to a recent survey conducted in Korea, most companies consider the completion of foreign
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education
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 as a requirement for employment. In
this
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 regard, all
students
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 should learn foreign
languages
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 at
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schools
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 to have fair opportunities
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job
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 market after graduation. In conclusion, despite the compulsory
education
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 may cause
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 to children who
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lack
of
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learning ability, foreign
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education
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 should be designated as a mandatory subject so that
students
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 can broaden their perspective on the world and have promising jobs in the future.
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