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Some people think that food is one of the most fundamental economic products and should be mostly produced by each country for its own consumption, with only minimal export of products to other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some individuals think that the food economy is one of the radical elements of a
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 which should be majorly produced by any
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 for its own uses.
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, with only minimal shipping of products to other
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. I am going to elucidate
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 statement and, in the end, I am going to give my own opinions on examples that I am going to discuss.
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 is obvious that the food industry is one of the most important economies for a
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. Of course, there should be exports and imports for the food industry. To give an example, some products are rare in some
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 because of climate problems or other reasons they should imports things that they can not produce, and other
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 can have the benefits from
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 action by exporting foods to other
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. To give more examples, the United Nations of Arab is the main source for exporting coffee,
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 is because coffee always grows in hot and dry climates.
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, tropical fruits mostly grow in African and South American arias.
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, these communities should export these products to
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 that need these kinds of things.
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, of ,course society should come over the consumption of their own
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, they should transport because of financial reasons.
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,
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 should not neglect the importance of these exportations because of these exports the price of things might decrease. To sum up, in my ,opinion
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 is better for every
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 after completing the needs of its own
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, they should smuggle the foods for other individuals which live in other communities.
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, I do not agree with the topic.
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