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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try an improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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A bunch of people think that it is a great idea to compromise the difficult situations like an inadequate job or less salary whereas others opine that don't lose hope just give efforts to change the bad situations. I personally feel a person always puts his efforts to make everything possible. Let's discuss both views in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one side, people accept their situations rather
Correct word choice
than
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fight them because they do not have
such
 confidence to tackle difficulties
therefore
, they live their
life
 as it is they live.
Moreover
, nowadays ,they find so much competition in every field , they don't want to lose their jobs while competing with others .
For example
, in a recent survey, 90% of people accept that they are doing work on the same job without satisfaction and a good salary only because they don't want any risk in their lives.
On the other hand
, everyone has the same privilege to change their
life
 with some effort. The public need to decide what they want in their
life
 and
then
 should follow it with their full energy.
For instance
, my friend Raman was very passionate in his
life
 and he decided to get a job in a multinational company
therefore
, he selected appropriate studies and did hard work for it and now he joined as a manager in that company. That's why nobody losses hope and even faces so many difficulties he can achieve his destination. In conclusion,
although
 it is difficult to leave comfort in
life
, sometimes it is very necessary to get out of your comfort zone to achieve the goal.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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