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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #individuals #government #action
Environment
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The environment
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 defines as
natural
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the natural
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 surroundings of
human
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humans
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 which comprises air, water, soil, plants and other essential natural resources. It has been dilapidated drastically by the activities of
human
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humans
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such
 as industrialization and so on, but
this
 alarming situation can be curtailed with proper initiatives from both
people
 and
government
.
Therefore
, as per
requirement
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 of
statement
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the statement
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, I am going to shed my knowledge
over
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 both
the
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views.
To begin
 with,
people
 have more responsibility as
compare
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compared
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 to
government
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the government
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 because they are the
one
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ones
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, who exploit the
environment
 in some form or the
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another
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other
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another
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,
therefore
people
 should take care of
environment
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the environment
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 due to multiple reasons.
Firstly
,
consumption
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the consumption
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 of excessive resources unnecessary by human to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their greedy needs make
environment
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an environment
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 on a degradation stage which in turn create the problem for all the living creatures because forests are
cutting
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cut
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 on
widespread
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the widespread
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 scale for urbanization,
as a
result
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,result
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 temperature is increasing which ultimately breeds many fatal ailments, so
this
 negative development should mitigate.
Secondly
,
emission
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the emission
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 of toxic gases from vehicles by
people
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results
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result
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inresult
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 tremendous damage
of
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to
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environment
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the environment
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 in the form of climate change, acid rain and many more,
hence
people
 should
use
 public vehicles as an alternative to keep
environment
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the environment
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 safe.
For instance
, Sweden is the cleanest country
of
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in
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 the world because
people
use
 public transport on
wide
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a wide
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 range.
However
,
government
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the government
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 can play a dramatic role in conserving
environment
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the environment
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 along with
people
 in
a
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apply
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multifarious ways.
First
,
government
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the government
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 can impose stringent laws and remove lax regulations for the industries and the
use
 of vehicles which emit huge harmful gases and smoke.
Secondly
,
government
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the government
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 can aware
people
about
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of
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 the aftermath of
damaging
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the damaging
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environment
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the environment
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 thereby
people
 will be meticulous
for
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about
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 saving their
environment
.
Thirdly
,
government
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the government
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 should promote organic farming so that
use
 of fertilizers and pesticides could be reduced to a greater extent.
For instance
, soil fertility is imperative for
cultivation
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the cultivation
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 of crops as well as for
crop's
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crop
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 rotation. In conclusion, I opine that
mindset
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the mindset
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 of
people
 needs to be changed towards
environment
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the environment
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 for ensuring
healthy
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a healthy
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 life for
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 generation,
and
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apply
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which can be feasible by the initiatives of
government
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the government
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.
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