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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
this
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 in regards to the advertisement in the ‘’Kids love’ magazine data October 26 . I would like to join your family to look after your child. I would like
mention
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 that not only I would like to care
babies
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, but
also
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 I have got my master ‘s science in child nursing for 3 years. I would like to work in
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 field that
related
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with
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 my major. I have been working
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as
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 kids
caring
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 in
nursery
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a nursery
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 school for 10 years.
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also
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 I have
experience
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to teach
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the
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children who are stressed from going to
community
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 . I think I can help
to
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your child ready
to
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 school. I am going
improve
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 my knowledge about the diseases minors ,
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 in my leisure time. When I was in your home. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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