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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Instructions Read the question below and write a thesis statement. You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task. You should write one sentence that clearly takes a stand and summarizes the statement in the question. Some people think that the only way to be successful in business is to have a unique product. Discuss if you agree or disagree.

Most
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the
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people are of the view that
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one
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 of the ways to excel in business is through your distinctive product/item. I strongly agree with the idea that
entrepreneur
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 can soar high in their business by investing
in
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particular
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a particular
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 item.
This
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further
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 elucidate the
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 statement with examples. To gain the trust and fly high with less
competitive
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 in the market as
compare
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 to multiple choices which
leads
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 to more chaos and
affect
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 the sale of the items.
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, a store
near
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by
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my house has
particular
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 item that everyone buys
it
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without any
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 thoughts but in case,
if
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 we reach out to the
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supermarkets
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super markets
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then
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 our market will soon be down. A unique
artifact
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 creates a brand for the
company
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.
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, Apple launched the iPhone, a mobile with very a good processor.
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 has now become the brand for the apple and
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 symbol for the people.
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, if we take another example,
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a Car
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Company
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 called “Rolls Royce”.
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company
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 produces cars
through
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 handmade and small quantities, but
this
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company
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 is
one
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 of the most famous car companies in the world. In the light of these facts,
one
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 concludes that
produces
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the
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unique things is
one
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 of the best ways to improve business.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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