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The internet is viewed as an excellent means of communication by many. However , there are some who would argue that it is actually destroying our communication skills. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

With the advent of
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 technology,
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 of
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 improved significantly from Text messaging followed by Audio to Video conferencing proved an excellent way of
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 for many
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while
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 some
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 argue that it is actually ruining our
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 skills. I opine on both the views with supporting points.
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 nowadays are hungry
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 the
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 speeds that are pushing the transmitting barriers in microseconds.
people
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 surf the
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 for long hours by spending most of
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 time
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 social media and OTT platforms.
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, they are totally lost in the virtual world ignoring the other means of
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 which will eventually rust the
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 skills of one person.
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, the parents bought a smartphone for attending online lectures for
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 coaching classes. but the child ended up creating a Facebook or Instagram profile to meet his friends and
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 games online.
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 resulted in a lack of physical
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 skills with his own parents.
On the other hand
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, the
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 is viewed as an excellent means of
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 over distant places around the world. The official video conferences like
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 Research summits, Business meetings, Job interviews, etc. are the areas where the
people
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 want to be prepared for the event before.
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 opportunity enables them to explore more about the different languages and professional ethics.
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, when I was searching for the universities that conduct the webinars on automotive research areas, found most of the programmes were delivered in their native languages which enabled me to learn the basics of the speech. In conclusion,
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 over the
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 has both the effects either in a bad or good side. It
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 depends upon one's perspective
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 way it consumes to utilise or waste
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time.
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 my opinion it is mostly going to be on the good side as there will be lots of
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 in the coming future.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines both views on the topic to set a clear foundation for your discussion.
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In your conclusion, try to be clearer about whether you lean towards one perspective more strongly over the other, and why.
coherence and cohesion
Work on creating smoother transitions between your ideas to enhance flow, making it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical errors, as well as punctuation and capitalisation methods, to improve the overall clarity of your writing.
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You provide relevant examples to support your points, which strengthens your arguments.
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Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, which is essential for this type of task.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • means of communication
  • enhanced communication
  • accessibility
  • diversity
  • global dialogue
  • face-to-face communication
  • social anxiety
  • superficiality
  • nuance
  • emotional connection
  • attention span
  • effective communication
  • verbal communication
  • written communication
  • mindful
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