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Excessive computer gaming is one of the biggest threats to children's physical and mental health in the 21st century. Discuss the problems and associated solutions for this issue.

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It is often a topic of discussion that computer
games
 are a threat to
children
's growth. Playing excessive
games
 results in physical or mental related issues in
children
.
Forthcoming
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 paragraph
examine
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 the problem deeply and learn the solution to resolve it. In the 21st
century
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children
 prefer to communicate with their friends and loved one's
virtually
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virtual
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.
In addition
 to
that
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apply
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playing
games
 and hosting ,gaming events are becoming more popular among the younger generation. On ,
hoilday's
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holiday's
holidays
 they prefer to play
games
 online
instead
 of playing in person. The addictive nature of gaming is difficult to cure.
For instance
, one survey shows that
children
's having less involvement in the real world are more likely to become unconfident and introverts in their teenage days. The solution
towards
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this
 problem would not be
straight forward
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straightforward
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 as it can hurt
sentiments
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the sentiments
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 of
children
 and they can take harsh steps. Parents and teachers should encourage
children
 to participate in activities which require physical presence.
Moreover
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 a reward system can be built to promote the students, actively involved in these activities. In conclusion, problems related to
children
 should be dealt with carefully and innovative ideas are required to divert the
children
's interest from virtual
games
 to real-life
games
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive
  • threats
  • physical health
  • mental health
  • associated
  • problems
  • solutions
  • address
  • issue
  • computer gaming
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