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With major cities continue growing, are there any problems to young people? How to solve these problems?

#cities #people
The map illustrates plans for two possible sites for a shopping mall in the
city
 of Brandfield. It can be seen that the two sites under consideration are in the north and the
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south east
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 of the town. The
first
 possible site for the shopping mall, S1, is just north of the
city
 centre, above the railway line, which runs from the
south east
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 of the
city
 to the
north west
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. If it is built here, it will be
next
 to a large housing estate,
thus
 providing easy access for those living on the estate and in the
city
 centre. It will
also
 be
next
 to the river that runs through the town. The site in the
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, S2, is again just by the railway line and fairly close to the
city
 centre, but it is near to an industrial estate rather than housing. There is a main road that runs through the
city
 and is close to both sites,
thus
 providing good road access to either location. A large golf course and park in the west of the town
prevents
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this
 area from being available as a site.
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