The increase in the amount of traffic is responsible for growing countries in many large cities and this has resulted in more traffic congestion particularly in rush hours. What changes could be taken to deal with this could be taken to

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the city.Rising traffic

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in big

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is higher than past it can cause car

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during rush hours. The following paragraphs will

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and recommend some

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that could be taken to tackle

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rush hours is one of the most significant problems in many big

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is causes the population has grown rapidly in big

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around the world Many

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need to move to urban

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for a better life and find more opportunities

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as a job where they can gain various experiences to improve themselves to be better and make more money. ,

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have their own car for convenient functions they do not need to take

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public transportation because it is so harmful,dirty,not enough time schedule to use

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.

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issue there are several things that the government could do.

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,the authorities should encourage citizens to use public transport

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of using their own cars by advertising the benefits of using public transportation or doing

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campaign that persuades the crown to reduce using their own cars in rush hours.

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, the government should improve public transportation by providing convenient , safe and clean facilities.

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, the authorities should move some business areas outside the city so that

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can move to these areas to decline the density of the population. To sum up , traffic

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may cause a dramatic rise in population the

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to tackle the

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the authorities should provide an advantage policy that makes

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a convenient life.