Many different countries have most shops and products as the same. Some consider it a positive development, whereas others consider it negative. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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globalization has led to many nations in a platform through which the varieties of the

products

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of the different

brands

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like Zara, Gucci and many more are effortlessly available through stores, and online platforms without visiting another nation.

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, there

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some drawbacks

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. The upcoming paragraphs elucidate the relevant reasons with examples to support my opinion. To embark, there

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certainly numerous benefits of the availability of

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and stores in

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different nations.

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, as in the increasing trend of globalisation, many

brands

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like Zara,

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player

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have their presence across the globe; their stores can be found around all the countries,

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that it becomes

convient

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convenient

to buy

product

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a product

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of international

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brand

in their own

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or even their own city.

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Initially

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poeple

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people

were able to buy

internation

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international

brand

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brands

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through

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visiting there.

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scenerio

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scenario

has changed many foreign

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are now

avalibale

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available

to sell their

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through

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offline and online mode.

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, despite having benefits of the availability of international

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shops' and

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products'

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all over the world, there are a few drawbacks which can not be ignored.

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similarities in design can be found in different countries because the same

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are

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present in their home

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they hardly get unique variety in another nation

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shopping.

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, one of my cousins visited Paris

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year as she wanted to purchase a product from there as a souvenir,

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however

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she ended up finding a unique product from there. Those brand's shops were

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available in her

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at almost the same prices.

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, there are many benefits which surpass the negative aspect of having international

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in all our the world and in my opinion, if people like to use

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particular brand they can easily find the same in all our the world, even if they are not in their own

country

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

319 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

homogenization
globalization
cultural identity
streamline
standardization
economic benefits
international community
cultural exchange
predictability
authentic experiences
proliferation
branding
tourism appeal
consumer comfort

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