Many different countries have most shops and products as the same. Some consider it a positive development, whereas others consider it negative. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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globalization has led to many nations in a platform through which the varieties of the
products
of the different
brands
like Zara, Gucci and many more are effortlessly available through stores, and online platforms without visiting another nation.
However
, there
is
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some drawbacks
also
. The upcoming paragraphs elucidate the relevant reasons with examples to support my opinion. To embark, there
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certainly numerous benefits of the availability of
products
and stores in
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different nations.
Firstly
, as in the increasing trend of globalisation, many
brands
like Zara,
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have their presence across the globe; their stores can be found around all the countries,
due to
that it becomes
convient
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convenient
to buy
product
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a product
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of international
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brand
in their own
country
or even their own city.
Initially
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poeple
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people
were able to buy
internation
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international
brand
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brands
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through
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visiting there.
However
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scenerio
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scenario
has changed many foreign
brands
are now
avalibale
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available
to sell their
products
through
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offline and online mode.
On the other hand
, despite having benefits of the availability of international
brands
shops' and
products'
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products
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all over the world, there are a few drawbacks which can not be ignored.
First,
similarities in design can be found in different countries because the same
brands
are
also
present in their home
country
they hardly get unique variety in another nation
while
shopping.
For example
, one of my cousins visited Paris
last
year as she wanted to purchase a product from there as a souvenir,
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she ended up finding a unique product from there. Those brand's shops were
also
available in her
country
at almost the same prices.
To conclude
, there are many benefits which surpass the negative aspect of having international
brands
in all our the world and in my opinion, if people like to use
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particular brand they can easily find the same in all our the world, even if they are not in their own
country
.
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