Many different countries have most shops and products as the same. Some consider it a positive development, whereas others consider it negative. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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globalization has led to many nations in a platform through which the varieties of the

products

of the different

brands

like Zara, Gucci and many more are effortlessly available through stores, and online platforms without visiting another nation.

However

, there

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some drawbacks

also

. The upcoming paragraphs elucidate the relevant reasons with examples to support my opinion. To embark, there

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certainly numerous benefits of the availability of

products

and stores in

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different nations.

Firstly

, as in the increasing trend of globalisation, many

brands

like Zara,

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player

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have their presence across the globe; their stores can be found around all the countries,

due to

that it becomes

convient

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convenient

to buy

product

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a product

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of international

brancd

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brand

in their own

country

or even their own city.

Initially

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poeple

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people

were able to buy

internation

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international

brand

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through

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visiting there.

However

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scenerio

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scenario

has changed many foreign

brands

are now

avalibale

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available

to sell their

products

through

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offline and online mode.

On the other hand

, despite having benefits of the availability of international

brands

shops' and

products'

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all over the world, there are a few drawbacks which can not be ignored.

First,

similarities in design can be found in different countries because the same

brands

are

also

present in their home

country

they hardly get unique variety in another nation

while

shopping.

For example

, one of my cousins visited Paris

last

year as she wanted to purchase a product from there as a souvenir,

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however

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she ended up finding a unique product from there. Those brand's shops were

also

available in her

country

at almost the same prices.

To conclude

, there are many benefits which surpass the negative aspect of having international

brands

in all our the world and in my opinion, if people like to use

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particular brand they can easily find the same in all our the world, even if they are not in their own

country

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4 paragraphs

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