Many different countries have most shops and products as the same. Some consider it a positive development, whereas others consider it negative. Discuss both sides and give your opinion
It is widely accepted that
,
globalization has led to many nations in a platform through which the varieties of the Remove the comma
apply
products
of the different brands
like Zara, Gucci and many more are effortlessly available through stores, and online platforms without visiting another nation. However
, there is
some drawbacks Change the verb form
are
also
. The upcoming paragraphs elucidate the relevant reasons with examples to support my opinion.
To embark, there is
certainly numerous benefits of the availability of Correct subject-verb agreement
are
products
and stores in a
different nations. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Firstly
, as in the increasing trend of globalisation, many brands
like Zara, John
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and John
player
have their presence across the globe; their stores can be found around all the countries, Capitalize word
Player
due to
that it becomes convient
to buy Correct your spelling
convenient
product
of international Add an article
a product
the product
brancd
in their own Correct your spelling
brand
country
or even their own city. Initially
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Initially,
poeple
were able to buy Correct your spelling
people
internation
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international
brand
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brands
through
visiting there. Change preposition
by
However
, Correct article usage
the scenerio
scenerio
has changed many foreign Correct your spelling
scenario
brands
are now avalibale
to sell their Correct your spelling
available
products
through
offline and online mode.
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apply
On the other hand
, despite having benefits of the availability of international brands
shops' and products'
all over the world, there are a few drawbacks which can not be ignored. Change noun form
products
First,
similarities in design can be found in different countries because the same brands
are also
present in their home country
they hardly get unique variety in another nation while
shopping. For example
, one of my cousins visited Paris last
year as she wanted to purchase a product from there as a souvenir, ,
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apply
however
she ended up finding a unique product from there. Those brand's shops were Add a comma
however,
also
available in her country
at almost the same prices.
To conclude
, there are many benefits which surpass the negative aspect of having international brands
in all our the world and in my opinion, if people like to use the
particular brand they can easily find the same in all our the world, even if they are not in their own Correct article usage
a
country
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