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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I have seen your advertisement on Ozzy
magazina
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magazine
 and I would like to offer myself for the position. I am keen to deal with
youger
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younger
your
child
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children
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 as long as I had to look after my two younger brothers until they turn 10 years old. I am in Australia to study at Manchester College which will start
in
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about six months from now. Before that, I am looking for a job which allowed me
getting
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 in touch with the language and culture.
Besides
 that, I am available to live with your
familie
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family
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me
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 it will be effortless not paying
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my rent anymore. Apart
of
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 that, I would say that in my free
times
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 I can go to do some outdoor activity with the kid, go to
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the doctors
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doctors
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 or even stay
along
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the
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 evening. I am not a going out person and I really appreciate
to get
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 in contact with children as much as possible. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Ana T.
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