Some people think that real life skills like cooking, housekeeping and gardening should be included in the curriculum as compulsory subjects? Do you agree or disagree? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and details.

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In our modern society, pupils learn various
subjects
for their future
life
.
For example
, they study languages, science and music.
Moreover
, recently some citizens believe that
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students
should learn
real
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life
skills
like cooking, housekeeping and gardening as compulsory
subjects
. I agreed with
this
statement since
real
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life
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skills
skill
are vital for our
life
.
To begin
with, learning
real
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life
skills
is more important for
people
especially
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young
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generaton
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generation
. 70 years ago when our grandparents worked, all
people
did not need to learn
life
skills
because the majority of men worked outside and only women did housekeeping,
moreover
women had enough time to learn
such
things.
Conversely
, nowadays a large number of
people
live alone since dozens of women have started work and become independent compared to before.
Therefore
,
this
makes clear that students should learn
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life
skills
as
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compulsory
subjects
for living better by themselves.
In addition
to that, getting
real
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life
skills
can increase the level of
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satisfaction
with our
life
.
A recent
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research conducted by the Japanese government has reported that
people
who learned
real
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life
skills
answered a 30
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higher score than their
counterpart
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for the question
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“Do you satisfy with your daily
life
?”. One of the famous researchers called
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Yoshi in Tokyo university analysed that citizens with good
real
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life
skills
feel less stress and can live healthy because they are good at these
skills
thanks to the curriculum.
Thus
, it becomes apparent that it is a wonderful idea that pupils
study
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real
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life
skills
. To sum up, learning
real
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life
skills
is more important compared to
berfore
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before
with the high percentage of
people
who living alone, as well as it makes our health condition better with less stress.
Therefore
, I agreed with the opinion that
real
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life
skills
should be included in the curriculum as compulsory
subjects
. After a thorough analysis of
this
subject, it is predicted that the number of schools which teach
real
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life
skills
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children will be increased significantly in
this
few decades.
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