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Many people feels that media coverage has becoming increasingly biased today . Why is this? What can be done to fix this problem?

Media
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 is the fourth pillar of the country.But, nowadays
media
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gave
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 inappropriate
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 related to some issues. In the below paragraphs, I explain why
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problem
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 could occur and what measures can be taken to tackle
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problem
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. On one hand,there are various broadcasts that only
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to increase
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 the TRP and giving false
news
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 .Sometimes, they hide some useful or important
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 under the pressure of high business owners.
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, they do not provide full
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 and
information
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 to the public.
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, a law related to farmers was made in India . In ,actuality law was against the farmer but the
media
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 said that the law was in favour of the farmer. Under the pressure of some businessmen, the
media
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 have hidden the live
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 related to farmer protests
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. So,
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the media
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 playing a biased role a lot of time against the public.
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, there are various points to solve
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problem
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.
Firstly
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,
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the Government
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 can take some serious steps against the
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 who give false
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. The government can make some specific laws and implement them against biased
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.
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, nowadays people
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 a lot of technology
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 as the
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. So, they can be fully aware of fake
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 through the use of the internet.
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, people can raise their voices against biased
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 because all
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people have the right to freedom and
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the right
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 to speech, so they can raise their voices and take some steps against
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. At
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, these are the main solutions to solve
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.
To conclude
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,
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 plays
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an important
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 role in today's world. There are various reasons why
media
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 became biased but if government and individuals take some steps
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this
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problem
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 can be solved.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow between paragraphs for better coherence. Connecting ideas with clearer transitions can help the reader understand your arguments more easily.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points, as some ideas need further elaboration to be fully convincing.
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Ensure that your arguments are clearly articulated and supported to provide a stronger overall response to the task.
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Your essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the issue and addresses both sides of the problem.
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You made a strong attempt to propose solutions to the issues raised, which adds depth to your response.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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