it is important for the childern to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. puninshment is necesssary to help them learn this distinction. to what extent do youagree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment parents and teachers be allowed to use?

Children are the backbone and the future of every nation.
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bad values. A fair amount of people think that
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not accord with that.
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understanding of behaviour without
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of all, rewarding the young minds and praising them, when they conduct a good behaviour, will boost their morale and learn the value of positive behaviour.
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a teenager is praised it brims with
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at the
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of Toronto in 2019, Canada's top two Universities, reported that 86% of people behave nicely with
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around through positive feedback from family and teachers . If
punishment
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, educators and parents must give little, small punishments i.e. not
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Tv for another 2 weeks or something they like has to be stopped to make them realise
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. To conclude, rewarding is
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way than
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